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lawlzz gave it
on 26th Nov 2008 and said:First Impression:
Your header image is really nice! The colors are fresh and it's all very sleek. I'm not in love with the font, but it's not too bad either. It might be a little too simple though; you could have added something else to it to make it a little more exciting.
I don't really like the image map thought. The text is a little too busy, in my opinion. They could stand to be spaced apart a little more, too.
I really like the horizontal stripes you have going across the header above the links. That was a nice touch.In your columns, you need a little more padding. The words are really close to the sides of the columns.
I didn't hardly notice the actual title of your blog. It isn't an actual header (h1, h2, etc), but just a normal text link. You
The font size of the rest of the text is perfectly readable, and the line height is reasonable as well. One thing I don't really like though is that the text in the sidebar is justified. It stretches out the spacing (like in the first line of your welcome message) and makes it look a little silly. Also, the first few sentences don't have the first word capitalized.Also, I don't understand why you have a second navigation when there are the same links in your header image. You only need one. =)
Owner:
You spelled "sophomore" right! Ha, that always makes me happy when people do that.
I don't really understand the picture of your desk/legs and the mug. I have a mug just like that though ;D
I can get an overall idea of your personality, so that's good.About:
Informative, a little long, but that's okay. On your affiliates page, you only have Shur listed, but in your sidebar I see a lot more affies than that. Why is Shur on this page all by their lonesome? =(
The credits page is substantial. =)Resources:
I don't really like these navigation links; regular text links would be just fine here.
Your icon textures are really good! You've got a lot of them too, which is really good.
Your stocks are okay. They're just stocks.
Your guide to blogging is pretty much the same as every other one I've seen. It's not bad, just not real original.Tutorials:
This shouldn't really be plural, as there is only one tutorial. The one you have is pretty good though. Lots of pictures. Yeah...you should make more. =D
Conclusion:
Your site is sleek and fresh, but lacking in content. But your site is new, so you have an excuse. ;D Just keep updating, and you're sure to be successful.
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Kari's Response:
Thanks. Well the reason why there isn't much content is because i took all celebrity stuff down and everything that my reviewers didn't like :P And for the affiliates page, it was because shur was a pending affiliate -- maybe ill change that. i'll take your advice and i'm definitely going to use it!
Mari gave it
on 24th Nov 2008 and said:First Impressions:Not too bad, because there are no celebrity images and the font you've used for the title is cool, but I don't really like the colors.
Layout: Just as a heads up, I'm viewing your layout in Firefox and it's centered fine, but it Internet Explorer 7 the layout is left aligned instead of centered. I'm not sure why, because in your CSS you're using "Margin: 0 auto" and that should work. You may want to ask someone with more coding experience about it.
For the colors, I think the whole thing is a too bright/light. The green in the header is very bright but it could work if you contrast it with more black and darker grays and darker greens. You're not really contrasting it, though, you have a lot of light brown and beige and light gray. So what you've done is put down a bunch of light, neutral, sort of blah colors and then added some random light green, and I don't really think it matches. Definitely change either the color of the background or the color of the main content and sidebar. The main content/sidebar's gray color clashes with the background's beige. I would make one of them a darker color.
Like I said above, I think the font you've used for the word "Lethargy" is really cool. However, the color of the ".paperanchor.org" is way too hard to read. Use a darker color!
Also, if you have the navigation displayed under the header, it doesn't need to also be on the sidebar. You've displayed the navigation once, people will see it since it's right there, and adding it again will just clutter up the sidebar. Oh, I see, you've imagemapped the navigation. It's nice of you to consider those using image-less browsers by also putting the links on the sidebar, but there's an easier way to make a horizontal navigation without imagemapping. Then you won't need to include the links on the sidebar. Try this horizontal CSS block navigation tutorial: http://www.tutorialtastic.co.uk/tutorial/horizontal_css_block_navigation
While we're on the subject of the navigation (the horizontal one), I think it would look better if the words were spaced out so that they filled the whole length of light brown box. Then the words wouldn't look so bunched together in the middle.
Content
I think it would look nicer for your blog titles if you used an h1 heading, like you have on the other pages and on your sidebar.
On your sidebar, the headings are all not capitalized correctly, like "who am i". I'm not sure if this is supposed to be cool or artistic or something, but it just looks sort of unprofessional. (I'm not saying that a personal website has to be professional, because they don't. I just think that not capitalizing the words doesn't look quite right.)
Your first paragraph, the one under "my little corner", has many words at the beginning of sentences that don't have a capitalized first letter. Go through and make sure all that all words at the beginning of a sentence have a capital first letter! The first few words of the paragraph, "hello and welcome to" are spaced out so that just these four words take up a whole line and it looks really weird. Try and fix this. I'm not sure exactly why the spacing is off, but using paragraph tags for your paragraph might be helpful.
I've noticed you have a habit of bolding and italicizing words and phrases in the middle of sentences; for example, you bold your site name every time you write it. This reminds me a lot of what teenyboppers do on their sites, and I know you are trying to add emphasis, but I don't think it's really necessary. Bold headings and things like that, but don't bold words in the middle of sentences.
At the bottom of the sidebar, the way you've used a h2 for the words "you should know" throws me off a little and doesn't look that good. Why not just make the "you should know" an h1 and have that part be a separate section instead of a subsection of the "important stuff" section?
I saw your blog entry on how the things you're planning on changing since your review from Review Me, and I already see improvement from when I last viewed your site. Good job!
Owner This page is informative and interesting but not too lengthy. That's good!
The first thing I notice about this page is that the words near the pictures need more padding. Two paragraphs rub right against the edges of the photo and it looks really cluttered.
You say "I'm assuming you came here because you would like some information on here, right?" but I think you meant to write "information on me" instead of "information on here".
These paragraphs are good, but sometimes they are a little random. You talk about Boston and then jump suddenly to your appearance. Try to keep your paragraphs organized-one about where you live, one about your appearance, one about your personality, etc.
The Likes are good, but movies, books, TV series, etc. like Twilight and Monk need to be capitalized and italicized. You've written twilight, but it should be Twilight. The same goes for Monk. The names of cities should also be capitalized: New York instead of new york. Christmas and Thanksgiving also begin with capitals.
Dislikes: You have "the scammers fakes liars cheaters hackers copiers" listed as one item. I would separate them with commas, like "Scammers, fakes, liars, cheaters, hackers, copiers"
Bands: These are all proper nouns, so the first letters need to be capital. the beatles=The Beatles. colbie caillat=Colbie Caillat.
About This is confusing because it says "About" on the navigation under the header but "Site" on the navigation on the sidebar. Pick just one name and stick with it. I would go with Site, because About is sometimes used as a name for a page about the owner.
It's good that you've explained the site's name and your web design history. The only thing I would do is change "Affiliates Application" to "Apply to be Affiliates" or "Affiliation Application". Oh, and "one word" doesn't need to be underlined. It looks sort of funny and doesn't add anything.
Resources Your icon textures are really nice. I'm sure people will want to use them. Same with the stocks!
A Guide to Blogging-your bullets aren't inside the content area, instead they've jutted outside into the background.
Besides that, this is a good article and it will probably be helpful to people.
Tutorials
Pen Tool Tutorial-I skimmed this and it looks well thought out and explained. Good job!
Coding
Your homepage has 13 errors in your XHTML. (I didn't check the other pages). Most of the errors are because you didn't close tags or you capitalized the words in the tag. Check out this tutorial about validating your website to XHTML Transitional to help you. 13 errors isn't too bad though, and you do have a doctype, so good start.
Your CSS is valid. Yay!
Overall
Things that are good now:
-Your Resources: The stocks and icon textures are nice, and the blogging article is helpful.
-Your Owner section: Besides some capitalization things, you've got some solid paragraphs of information and good lists of your likes, dislikes, etc.
-Valid CSS.
-Your blogs-I've read a few and found them to be well thought out and interesting.
Things you need to work on:
-Capitalization, Capitalization, Capitalization. Believe me, in this review I got tired of reminding you to capitalize things. If you use capitalization well, it automatically makes your writing seem smarter and better.
-Validating your XHTML.
-Adding more tutorials-one was good, but I'd like even more.
-The layout, especially the color scheme
-Not making so many words bold.You've got a lot to improve on, but you are doing well. In just a few days you've already gotten a lot better. So keep at it and you'll keep improving.
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Kari's Response:
Thank you so much for this review. I really appreciate it! You focused on the capitals/grammar/nitty gritty stuff which was really helpful :)
I'm definitely going to work on all that you let me knowOlivia gave it
on 23rd Nov 2008 and said:This is going to sound awful, so please forgive me! Upon first reading the site name I thought it was some kind of diesease... Lethargy.... I'm so sorry! Before reading any content I sped to the 'Site' section to see if you explained what your site name meant. Hmm. No explanation. Damn, was looking forward to your reason of choice! Ah well.
First Impressions: Your layout is neat and lovely :) Very reasonable for a personal site. I do like that the site name appears very boldly in the header, as it makes your site name rememberable and noticable. Anyway, loved your first blog on this page! I can't wait to see Twilight and I appreciated your comments on the film. I would definately come back here to possible read more film reviews.
I also notice you have the navigation twice - this would be fine if both navigations had the same words for each link. Despite the links leading to the same pages, my first thought was that it was a completely seperate navigation for extra content. Since it does lead to the same pages, perhaps it might be better to link them both the same.
Girl/Owner: This page is very cute and you give just the right amount of information here. I like how it's all on one page and you've added your goals at the end. The pictures maybe slightly confusing... why don't you add a title to the image so that when a visitor hovers over the image it can read 'Me at my desk..' etc. Otherwise it's a bit random!
Site/About: Ahah! Perhaps before the links to affiliates, credits etc, you could add a little sentance/paragraph of why you chose the site name? I know it might mix in a bit into site history, but it would be very useful to the visitor. All these links to seperate pages... it seems to me to just be an extra block for the visitor to get through to read the content. Might I suggest instead only listing affiliates and links as a seperate page and putting all your site information on to one page?
Resources: I'm not a graphic-y type person so I shan't be able to review this section with justice! You have a lot to offer here and it's a nicely organised section.
Tutorials: Again I won't allow myself to judge these, but they're very neat :)
Final Comments: I think you're doing well and you've got a lot to offer here! I haven't given you more stars on the basis that I felt nothing was very new or original. Alot of sites do what you do. Despite this Lethargy was a nice site to browse and I would suggest for the future something new and exciting to bring 'that something special' to your site!
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Kari's Response:
Thanks for the input. Next time i probably won't be using image mapping. Also ill write more about the site name, but i actually put it on one of the pages -- however im going to compile it into one page next time :)
ill add a tooltip to the images on my about me section as a caption so it won't be so confusing.![[img: avatar]](/avatars/Theresa.jpg)
Theresa gave it
on 23rd Nov 2008 and said:Viewing your site with Firefox in Windows XP on a 1280x1024 screen resolution
First Impression/Asthetics
It's one color bright! I love the color and all shades of it but you should seriously consider darkening up the shade of your header and background. There's just not enough contrast going on here.Your header is awfully boring. The font you used is sweet, I like it, but there's nothing else, even the white text for the sub-title I can barely read! After squinting and straining I finally realized that it was the title for who hosts you.
Your menu, which is actually an image map (those are kind of outdated, you may want to consider a horizontal menu), is way too pushed together, you should space your words a bit more.
The justified text on your sidebar isn't pretty. If you want to change something about your sidebar, try just making the font smaller but letting the text flow in default. The smaller text will also fill the space up better. ;)
If you have your menu running horizontally across the page then why do you have a secondary menu with the same content along the sidebar?
(Note: You could use some margins around your images so your text doesn't butt right up against them. Oh, and your have a huge blank space under your main text where the sidebar extends further then your content.)
Your Content
Blog: I can forgive that you have several grammatical errors, want to know why? Because you're typing as though you were actually talking. Putting emphasis into your words, I enjoyed that. I wasn't absolutely interesting in what you were talking about with the "Twilight" thing because I'm not into it and I don't have time to go through ALL of your entries. I am sure it would appeal to those who have the same interests as yourself.Owner: Your personality really pops out. You type as though you were talking to your closest friend and I can't get over it. You've got some good information on here, it seems informative enough. ;)
About: I don't like how you have a list of links here to sub-pages. You can put it all on one page and "contact" should probably be in the "owner" section. You also have javascript links that act to take a person back forward or to reload the page. Those are REALLY unnecessary, most people know where those buttons are on their browser.
On your "Credits" page, you should consider telling what exactly you are crediting these sites for. It'll be easier for your visitors to navigate without having to GUESS where they're going.
You really could throw the Link Back, History, Affiliates and Credits pages all on one page.
Resources: Your brushes are absolutely horrible! They look like no effort was put into them, if I were you (which I am not, but just saying..) I wouldn't even offer those for download, I don't really see who will. Anyone can make those things in MS Paint.
The icons, none of those images are really yours to give away. I can't tell you whether or not I like your work on the icons because it's not really YOUR work.
I do like your icon textures. If a person knows what to do with them, some of those images could prove interesting.
I hope the images in the "stocks" section are yours or else you don't really have the right to distribute them. They really are nice though, I would use them for sure.
ALL OF YOUR PAGES ARE LOADING REALLY SLOW! I suggest you create THUMBNAILS for your "stcks" and your "textures"! Your "resources" almost crashed my browser. Definitely have to lower the size of those pags!
Tutorials: Your icon tutorials are too simple and it's nothing that someone tinkering around couldn't figure out on their own.
Your layout tutorial, your redistributing an image that never belonged to you. You're giving your visitors the images to make the layout and piece them together with a few steps thrown in here and there. This isn't a tutorial!
Your pen tutorial isn't actually too bad but it's something that I could Google and come up with a ton of tutorials for. It's not super duper original but it's not crap.
Your Icon Sort tutorial, I don't know what it's about. I'm a stranger and I don't use this script. I have never used Icon Sort and have no idea what kind of script it is or HOW it sort my icons. You should also credit the creator of the sript.
All in all I gave you one star because while you seem to have a great personality, your site is not aesthetically pleasing to me and the content is kind of useless.
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Kari's Response:
Thank you so much! The stocks are my own photography, maybe i'll make a note of that in the page. And for the layout, next time i won't image map it. Also, i'll work on getting the thumbnails. after reading other people's reviews i've decided i'l probably take down the brushes and textures -- because i don't think they're original, and as i said above im working on getting all the celebrity images off my site.
UPDATED 23 Nov 08:
as well as the icons and ill work on better tutorials :)![[img: avatar]](/avatars/dooleh.png)
dooleh gave it
on 23rd Nov 2008 and said:This is my first review, so bear with me!
First Impression: Very clean-cut, nice colors! Green is great and welcoming, so it creates a comfortable environment. I am really impressed that you have a great site while it is young! Very nice!
Coding/Layout: Indeed this is not a first impression. I tested your site for validation and sorry to say, but it failed. 22 errors. Check here to see what I mean. Usually, this would be provocative to see, but since you have a really new site, I'll let it slide. The header is cluttered with many words, including the centered navigation. Honestly, stick to CSS for navigations unless it is absolutely necessary to image-map it.
As for the CSS, I am not too impressed. I don't like how the dotted & dashed lines are being used in some of the most awkward places. Also, the comments page CSS is very tacky. Change it to something more simplistic, like your layout! I'll give you props, however, as your CSS is valid! Good job! Just play around with it a bit to make it look more appealing!
Blogs: I've been to numerous websites and I don't mean to sound rude, but I was expecting your blog to be a a bit like most, the lyk omggz i updated with lykk, 2000trillion ICONS of EdwardCULLEN so cool Oh lyk i HAVTA go but tak to youzz lata check my myspace and lyk, comment meeee!!!!!!!! type of blogs that make me hurl. I opened the page anyway and found that you can actually form a sentence, which relieves me! I read your review of the Twilight move (which I have yet to see) and I COULD ACTUALLY COMMENT ON IT WITH AN OPINION. Usually I run away from the site to escape the stupidity that awaits.
Owner: Well, I honestly think that you should keep this page the way it is. Good.
Agh, lets get to the content!
Content: Your content overall is average (not good). I think I've seen everything you have here at other sites. Not to say that you steal content, but it is all just the same. Try to find different things to put on your site. Don't ask me, as I have no idea how to make resource sites! Same applies to tutorials.
Overall: 3 stars. I have yet to witness the creativity you have! Good site, great thoughtful blogs and the coding is quite impressive for a new site, but you need to make your site stand out of the crowd!
HAND CRAMPS! OW!
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Kari's Response:
Thank you for the review! I will work on the css, and yeah i know the comments page is kind of gross at the moment. And thank you about the blog. I'll definitely work on the content. Also I just checked how my site was for validation because your link didn't
UPDATED 23 Nov 08:
Thank you for the review! I will work on the css, and yeah i know the comments page is kind of gross at the moment. And thank you about the blog. I'll definitely work on the content. Also I just checked how my site was for validation because your link didn'tUPDATED 23 Nov 08:
gah i presssed respond. anyway, the link didn't work but i only got 13 errors. anyways ill work on fixing that. thank you so much!Emma gave it
on 22nd Nov 2008 and said:Firstly I apologize if this is all over the place and hard to understand. It is my first ever review.
First Impression - The first thing I see is the header. The colour is okay, there is just something about it that doesn't take my fancy. I do like the css though. Maybe a darker shade of green or several shades of green might work a bit better? The image mapping is good.
Content -
About Me - This is good. It is nicely set out and you have relevant information. Not too much but just enough.Resources -
Brushes - These are good. I would definitely use some of them.Icons - Your icons are nice. I especially like some of the mean girls ones.
Icon Textures - I like these. They are different. I like some of the swirly ones.
Stocks - I think some of these could be used as photography. I think some of the stocks would be better suited as photography.
Textures - They are good. Maybe add some more so there is more as a variety?
Tutorials - These are good and clearly written. I would recommend adding more, with more variety.
Site - Nicely organised.
Final Conclusion - For being open just one week, you have a very good site. All I would recommend is adding more content, more tutorials, and keep up the good work!
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Kari's Response:
Thank you. I'll definitely add more textures and tutorials and for the stocks, yeah they were photography but I thought I could use them as stock photography as well. But I'll try to separate that out then :) And thanks for the info about the layout. I agree, it didn't really stand out to me. I'll probably be putting up a new one soon.
Derick gave it
on 22nd Nov 2008 and said:First Impression
The layout is ok. I am not a big fan of that shade of green, but it doesn't hurt my eyes or anything. When looking at your front page, it looks like a bunch of text mashed together. It is very crowded and doesn't make me want to read what you have to say. Maybe break some things up with some images or something.Links
I don't like your block links. When you hover over them, it is impossible to read. Hover block links can look good, as long as they are used the right way. I am also not a big fan of regular links that change size when you hover. It annoys me. But again, that is just my opinion.Content
I really like your icons. I wouldn't worry about having celeb images... No one really cares. Movie companies have better things to do them worry about who is using a screen shot to make an icon. :PYour tutorials are pretty good too. Some of the tutorials are basic though - stuff you can find on lots of sites. But they are still good to have.
Your About Me page is verrryyy texty. The first paragraph is really long. It makes me want to just skip over it. I suggest putting a few pictures or something to give the reader a break. They don't even have to be pictures of you if you don't want . I like seeing what other people's rooms look like, or pictures of their favorite things. It makes me feel connected with the website owner.
All in All
This is really good for only being open for a week. You have obviously been working very hard on your site. I don't know anyone who's site has looked like this after one week. The biggest problem for me is the layout and hover block links. Maybe change those. But you have the beginnings of a great site.Using Safari on Windows | Report This?
Kari's Response:
Thank you. I just spaced out the text more so hopefully it's easier to read. I might add some more padding in between the content + navigation area. Also I will try to space out the text more, but I think it was just that this blog I wrote was pretty long. Thanks for the input on the about me page. I'll definitely get some pictures up. And I'll try for some more interesting tutorials :)
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