Electric City

Electric City

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Electric City is a personal blogging site ran by me, Shannon. I've also thrown in some extra stuff such as graphics and tutorials. Please review me honestly! (:

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Electric City has 11 Reviews

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    wiwaneko gave it ****- on 23rd Jan 2009 and said:

    First Impression/Layout
    Uhhhh...you're thirteen? I honestly would click out of your site as soon as that image popped up; I would think I accidentally clicked on a porn site or something. I like the background, though it doesn't repeat very well. The text is
    too small, so you should probably increase it to about 11px or something. Making the line-height bigger wouldn't hurt,
    either. Also, I'm pretty sure the image you have on the header is copyrighted, so think about removing that.
    3.5/5

    Owner Section
    I'm glad you don't care what other people think about you. I'm always labeled as "emo"...even though I look nothing like
    an emo. Whatever...I know what it's like to have low self-esteem, but I thought you didn't care what people thought about you? I've learned that the cure to low self-esteem is to look at all the good things about yourself and not the bad. I think it's just being a teenager these days; we have so much that we're supposed to amount to. Anway, off-topic. Again, the text is really small.
    5/5

    Portfolio/Trash Section
    I wish I could review this, but there isn't such a page. Take this link down if you don't have a page for it. It appears as though you want to make it seem like you have more pages than you really do, but "quality before quantity" always works best. Also, I'm not offended by the whole "trash=visitor" thing, because I just don't care what you call me/the content, but I sense some teenage angst if I'm not wrong. You get a zero out of five because you don't even have these pages, yet you have them listed in the sidebar.
    0/5

    Site Section
    Pretty standard. Although you credit some Josheh dude, you don't say what you're crediting him for. You should fix that.
    5/5

    Review Section
    For the website review page, I lauged because you said, "No pornographic,...or innapropriate websites..." Then I looked at your header...You already did a review, but you don't even have it on the page. Unless it's at the person's site? Oh well. I don't understand the film/book reviews...do you ask other people for movies to review? Why don't you just review a movie you've seen? Hmm...
    3.5/5

    Exits Section
    Standard. I don't understand why you have the name of the person linked, but then you list the site's name.
    5/5

    Conclusion
    For being thirteen, your site is okay. The thing you should think about is, "What kind of people do I want to attract to this site?" I think men would really like your site based on the header image, but most other people would probably click right out. But maybe you don't care how many people view your site. Super. Anyway, it'd be nice if you increased your font size and got rid of the copyrighted header image. Also take down the text on the navigation that's pretending to be links. If you want people to know that you'll soon be providing that stuff, write it in your blog! Take your time on making content and don't rush it, because that would most likely result in crappy crap that no one would want. You seem like a cool person and you have a lot of talent. Just keep working and you'll be awesome...er. I hope you found this helpful.
    Site rating: 3.5/5

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    INSUBHAZE gave it ***-- on 16th Jan 2009 and said:

    First impression:
    i like the simplicity of the layout...the header image is nicely blended and its not too much....
    the background is a nice texture.....im personally a big big fan of scratch textures >_<
    i like the way next to each link in the navigation you have a little description....i also like the css so far maybe you could've thrown in a little tiny bit of blue or something in the headers to match the header image but its okay if you dont because it looks fine just like that

    Owner
    i like the simple about me section....you tell the basics and that all most people need to know instead of rambling on and on

    Content
    im guessing that your site is fairly new because there is no content :( i was looking forward to seeing some content.....but then again you did mention the thing about why there isnt any content up so i wont hold anything against you for that

    Reviews
    ummm i see one completed review but no link to the review....i think you should put a link to the review on your site or something....why put the reviewed person there if there is no review????

    Overall
    the site looks okay....i guess it'll be even better when you add some content i guess....keep up the good work though >_<

    -insubordinate haze

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    Jade gave it **--- on 14th Jan 2009 and said:

    Mozilla Firefox / Windows Vista / 1280x800

    First Impression

    The tilt you have on her makes me feel like turning my head to look at you site right. All your content looks crammed to the left. Sure, I'm using a widescreen laptop, but even when I resize my browser to 1024x768, it only takes up half the page.

    Overall Design

    Your background doesn't repeat very well; it's easy to tell where it begins and ends. Your text looks pretty cramped, and your links are just extremely small. It's hard to find the link to comment on a post. Your header image... I don't see how that's supposed to fit in with the rest of your site. Your smilies are yellow, your text is gray, your links are gray, yet the header image is bright pink and blue.

    When I look at your site, I feel a need to shift to the left and tilt my head to the right, just to make it look right to me. Why do you have an "ignore it" section on your sidebar? I see the various links to wordpress, a stat counter, etc... but it seems pointless to me to announce to visitors that you're supposed to ignore that part.

    Blog

    Those smilies add unnecessary space in between your lines. Making your text bigger, or using different images, could help. You should also add more space in between posts so people can tell that they're separate things.

    Owner

    I was so happy that you could type in paragraphs in your blog... and then you have this chunk of text that happens to have a few line breaks near the bottom. You say that you hate bad grammar and spelling, yet then go on to spell "labeled" wrong.

    I might as well point out that this sentence is awkward:

    "This site is a personal blog for me to let my anger, and happiness out - without being judged, so if you don't like the things I say, you should leave."

    There shouldn't be a comma after anger, and I don't know why you have a dash between out and without.

    Site Info

    "Everything on this website is made by me, unless stated otherwise, so please don't steal."

    I'm not so sure about this, unless you own rights to those two pictures in your header?

    Overall

    Your site has potential, and you have a very strong voice. Just move your content a bit, up the font size, and be a little more creative with your layouts in the future.

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    Baohan gave it ***-- on 1st Jan 2009 and said:

    Hello, I'm Baohan and I'm going to review your site. :)

    First Impression: Um... not my style and it's a little 'parental advisory'. Scene queens are definitely not my thing. As Sigrun said, she really needs to put on some clothes.

    Design: I don't like the fact that everything is crammed to the left. It looks kind of squashed. Also, a different background where the content is would be nice so that everything don't blends to each other. You also need some padding, and fast. They looks so squish together.

    Your links are also a little 'un-readable' because it can easily being mistaken as something on the sidebar, not navigation.

    OWNER: You need some paragraphing here, a simple linebreak will do the job. You can also use the p tag.

    You can't stand bad grammar and spellings? C'on, everybody makes mistake!

    Well, everything else on this page seems fine.

    Porfolio, I'm afraid that you forgot a link here.

    SITE: Really little information here. Maybe you can add some?

    You only have on credit? What about the place where you took your layout picture from? You need to credit everybody's material. Unless you took the picture, of course.

    REVIEW: I don't really see the point of reviewing reviews so I'm skipping this part.

    EXITS: Some sites for blogging... nothing much here.

    Overall, I think that your website is a bit like most teen's weblog around the corner. You need to make your website a little more interesting, a little more different.

    Well, I wish you all the best.

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  5. Sophia gave it **--- on 1st Jan 2009 and said:

    ummm look the design is awful since i really hate sluts not because of yur work,your css is very good i luv it!so basiclly it'll draw people away the first thing people see is the design fix ur header u can do better with more than a half naked woman who needs to put some clothes on

    Your site name in no way matches ur layout!the site is electric city but when you open it half naked chick!i personally expected something more fasinating with awsome designs your 13 year sol?with a horrible header like that?your parent may not know you are doing this! content cool cool

    Organiztion?yes ur organized you update often Overall:
    not a good website thats why i gave 1 1/2 star for the design mainly not content see it effected even my other judgment!

    Content: have to give a star on it

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    joshehsaurus gave it ***-- on 31st Dec 2008 and said:

    Well. I don't care about what other people have put, 'cos I love my Shannons site.
    Heres my review.
    Layout: Well. I actually made this layout for you. Despite people thinking its a bit horny, I'm rather proud. I think it goes well with the background, and is well presented ;]
    Blog: Yes, i'm actually rating your blog. Everyone needs to know if they're visiting a boring blog, right? Well. I only thing your blogs lack, is me! Yeah. Lovely blog.
    Pages:
    Owner - This is generally a well presented page. Headers for each category. You went into a lot of detail with the hometown business.
    Site - Ohwow, i'm your only credit? I'm honoured. The top part is really good. Not a lot of history on there, but it's not too bad.
    Reviews - Ahem, i'm still awaiting my review. Nice little section. Can't see any flaws really.
    Improvements: Well, I'm being totally honest here. I think 3 stars should actually cut it. I think if you really worked hard at it, created your own layouts, and then this could rustle up a nice little place.

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    OMGalarm gave it ****- on 31st Dec 2008 and said:

    First impression; I got a really good first expression when I looked at your site! The layout is really awesome and it all has such a good look that I'm interested in reading more.

    Layout; Ohmi gosh, I laughed so hard by those grandma's here, chastising you for using pic of a scantily clad woman. You aren't running a kindergarten homepage. I've seen awesome layouts with Miss Mosh in just her shoes, and I think that if someone can't handle this, they should rather turn their heads and go back to like, a Jonas brothers fansite or something. Now, back to the layout itself. I think scene queens are perfect for layouts, especially Raquel, because they are so colorful and just.. interesting to look at. She gives your lay the electric blue and pink, and it looks great. i like the color effect you've used on her, and I gid the scratch background. I also fancy the font and the way you've placed the text.

    CSS; Awesome font and color. I think there's enough margin and padding, only thing is that the text is too close to the left side. A little more space there, and it's perfect. Also, I realu think you should integrate the strong colors from your layout into the CSS. Maybe in the bold and link colors.

    Sidebar; I think you got everything you need here, and it's nice to look at, and well organized. The ignore section doesn't have any purpose, though.

    Pages; When I read your longer texts, I see that you definitely should have some more line height. It's a little tiresome to read. Oi, it all goy grey when I highlighted, cool!

    Owner; These are one of the text that are a little hard to read without more line height. You explained well how you are, and you sound honest :) I like list like that!

    Trash; this is the main thing visitors are looking for, so since your site is new and you don't have any content yet, you should work hard to get up some good content as soon as possible. I think it'll be good :)

    Site; nice and concrete here.

    Reviewes; you should maybe add a little text over the links here, tell a little about your reviewing, just some chatter to make it look better than with just bare links. It's good that you have forms for submitting - it's very good looking and clean too.

    Overall; I like you site! :) I'll def come back to snoop on your content when that is up. Only thing is, (kind of silly to mention), you come of as a little short and strict by your text, like 'I have other things to do', and you seem a little defensive on the 'owner' part. If that isn't intentional, you should maybe try to read it though and soften it up a little, to make you seem a little more welcoming to your visitors? :) You tell that you are an outgoing person once one get to know you, so let that bubble side of you get though ;))

    I gave you four, only because the lack of content. Keep up the good work!

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    Chocobo gave it ***-- on 31st Dec 2008 and said:

    While I will not add to the horror of the woman's lack of conservative attire, I must say that she does look artsy -- in a "Miami Ink", Kat Von D sort of way. Enough said.

    Moving right along, the (other) first thing I noticed about Electric City's layout is the chunk of empty space hovering over Sidebar #1! In my opinion, it would be more eye-pleasing if you add to the main picture and fill up that space. In addition, consider placing a [margin-left: x-amount] declaration towards the sidebar's CSS, as I find it sitting too close to the blog content.

    Your text's purposely minimal line-height is clearly part of the style, so I will not touch upon that. However, I do agree with Sigrun's comment about the text being "a bit too small" -- I especially found myself squinting at the italicized, 7pt Georgia for the "listening to" headings! As a solution, please consider increasing Georgia's font size, as well as Tahoma's.

    Naturally, increasing the font size should lead to fattening up the blog's div widths. I realize this may be part of the layout's style, but please consider this as well.

    Your tone is very honest (almost candid?). It's also sarcastic and bitingly humorous at certain parts -- I like it! Especially for the current layout, your tone adds "edge" to it.

    I find the "About Me" page upfront and very "here's who I am; here's what I like; here's what I dislike. Got any problems? Tough." As I mentioned, I like this attitude, but I think the page could use some picture(s) "spicing." It doesn't necessarily have to be of you, but perhaps of your interests? For example, you express that you like ipods -- so maybe you could upload a picture of your own?

    The "Portfolio" and "Trash" pages: Excited for these! I hope you get them up soon. I giggled at the trash title. :)

    The "Site" page provides basic information, although I feel as though you should cut out the first two sentences ("Electric City/Voltagebox is a personal blogging site...please credit me.") and place them under "the credits" heading instead. But then again -- that's just my feeling. Otherwise the page is solidly written.

    I took a look at your HTML, and uh-oh -- at all costs, inline styles (ex: <div style="position: absolute;">) must be avoided! Instead, give each div an id (or a class, whichever is more appropriate), and style the divs from your CSS stylesheet instead.

    In addition, I advise closing all your "empty elements" (tags that contain no content, such as <br> and <img>) with a forward slash "/" before the end bracket. So, <br> would look like <br /> and <img> would turn into <img />. This is a practice that must be developed, since you are making a (proud!) transition from HTML to XHTML. :)

    In conclusion, I think Electric City has great potential. It has a good balance of spunk and edge to it that -- I believe -- makes it fun to visit. Get those "trash" goodies up, Shannon!

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    paintedskies gave it **--- on 30th Dec 2008 and said:

    Although some boys may like these sort of pictures, I think they're a bit unsuitable for a teen blog. The typeface is extremely small with no line-height. It just looks like it is merging together which is hurting my eyes. The sidebar is also to close to the content, so I think you should shift it across by about 15px, otherwise it starts to look messy and unorganized. All in all the layout itself isn't too bad, it's just the CSS and the pictures which aren't really appropriate.

    SIDEBAR - Trash and Portfolio aren't linked, so you shouldn't really place them on the navigation section. Also, the 'ignore it' section... I've seen this sort of thing a lot. What is its purpose? Just bookmark the links instead of having an open invitation for hackers. It's stupid.

    ABOUT - This page is pretty well written. I feel you have written enough information for people to know what your feelings are, but what are your passions and hobbies? Where do you see yourself in the future? What is your dream job, etc.

    SITE - This page is empty, to be fair. Firstly, I'd like to know why you are crediting Josheh. What has he done to help you? Did he make your layout, code it, or even make your CSS? We need to know these things just encase someone is giving you credit for it when the credit should go to him. There isn't really anything else to say on this page. It's a little blunt.

    REVIEWS - It's quite a good idea to show people the reviews you have done over at Rev.iew.me, however it would be easier to just link your profile so people can browse through your other reviews; I noticed you have only listed Sarah of Cherry-pip. You have done a lot more reviews than that, though. I can't say nothing on the book and film reviews because there isn't anything there. I have one suggestion: cut out all of those pages. List all of your reviews on one page so the visitor will find it easier to find the different reviews, because at the moment I have to click on about 4 links to get to them.

    Over all, your website isn't the worst I have seen. It has room for improvement, and I'm sure that in time you will improve. Hopefully you will be able to improve your coding skills, too! :)

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  10. Victimizes gave it **--- on 30th Dec 2008 and said:

    The girl in your layout needs to put more clothes on! If I am honest I don’t think a 16 year old should be looking at them type of images never mind a 13 year old using them in her website layout! I'm pretty horrified if I'm honest. Okay, so let’s forget about the horrific images. I dislike the use of scratch textures as backgrounds, maybe they would look alright if they were used correctly, but sadly this is not the case. What you have done to these two images doesn't improve the look of them at all. She has a grey forehead, Missing toes etc. Most of all, the image is only half cut out. All of it just looks wrong! I don't like the font and I don't like the way you have placed it.

    I'm not all that fussed on the CSS either. I've never been a big fan of Courier or any of them fonts. I'm debating on whether I think your text size is too small, and I think it is. There is no spacing between the lines so it all looks jumbled into one. I also think it would look better if your content text (meaning sidebar, blog, etc...) was all justified.

    Owner: I think you would have been better off putting the "back to basics" points before the whole paragraph about yourself, I think it makes more sense. The "Shannonxrawr" link you have at the bottom of your paragraph means nothing to most people unless you tell them what it is... You could make another little section for this type of thing or put it underneath the "more" bit. I hate it when people do what you have done to say what they like and dislike. I'm pretty sure it's just as easy to put "I enjoy going out with my friends, fashion and makeup..." It really does my head in when decent people do the whole full stop thing instead of proper sentences.

    Portfolio: Delete the portfolio link if you don't have a portfolio. It doesn't make you look like you have more content. If you do have a portfolio I recommend you fix this.

    Site: I don't really find this page all that informative to be honest. You could add a few more pieces, like how the site got to be where it is... And I'm pretty sure Josh isn't the only person you own credit to.

    Trash: Do you really think the stuff you make is trash? Okay then... Anyways, delete this "link" if you have nothing.

    Reviews: I don't really think I can write a review on how you write reviews, so I'll leave this.

    Exits: There's nothing really to write about on this page. Although I am not quite sure why you have a page that has exactly the same links on as your sidebar, the only differences are they are in a different order and you have added the site names. Surely you could save space and delete this page? Or at least from your main sidebar and just put it in the sites page?

    Other: A couple of things I noticed on your sidebar: The owner. The way you have written this makes no sense at all. I go back to what I said about the whole full stop thing instead of people using correct sentences. I might actually read this bit if it wasn't filled with incorrectly used full stops. It would make a lot more sense if you said: "My name is Shannon and I am a 13 year old girl. I was born on the 17th of February, 1995, meaning I am an Aquarius..." The currently things doing my head in as I don't know what's happening in 15 days! You could set it so that when I hover over the icon it tells me what it is. I don't really see the point in the "ignore it" thing, as I am sure you could just bookmark all of them sites and find them just as easy.

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    Sigrun gave it **--- on 30th Dec 2008 and said:

    First impression:
    Yikes! Where are the main content? All I see is a picture of a woman that needs to put on some clothes and a possible sidebar sticking up. Everything is pushed to the left.

    Ah.. there we go. There's the main content... I think the text is a bit too small, and the width of the columns are a bit too small too. I would go for a centered and more readable design.
    I almost didn't catch where your navigation was first. The links are so small. Hmm. I think increasing your line-height in your text would also do you some good with the readability.

    When I try to click at the portfolio link I discover that it's not a link. Maybe it's not finished? Maybe that's why it's not a link yet? If it's not ready for the public yet, why bother have an "unclickable link" there? The same goes with the "trash" "link". Why would you call visitor content "trash" anyway? Oh here you have some trash. - Well thanks alot! This doesn't make me feel appreciated as a visitor at your site at all.

    As I browse through your site I catch that you don't really have such a nice tone through it. It seems kind of hostile. If that's the right word.. For example:
    "Your review will usually be up within about a week, I have other things to do."
    Maybe you'd be better off formulating this sentence in an other way? How about just cutting out the "I have other things to do". Again, this does not improve my feeling of not being appreciated as a visitor on your site.

    Overall, I had a bit of a hard time browsing through your site. I squinted a lot due to the small text, and I wished that you'd center your layout and added more padding and space. Also you'd be better off increasing your font size.
    And who is that in your layout image anyway? Raquel Reed? Do you know her? Are you a fan of her? Is this a fansite for Raquel Reed? I don't get the connection. I suppose you don't have a permission to use those photos on your webpage? Those photos are probably copyrighted to someone else, and are not yours to use.

    I'm just saying: Get rid of celebrities in your layouts, increase your font size, add more padding, get a friendlier tone and I might consider visiting you again. Sorry to say, if I wasn't reviewing your site I would click the x right away. You get 1 1/2 star for the effort though. I see that you're only 13, but I bet you can do better if you want. :)

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