Eternal Blue Rose

Eternal Blue Rose

***-- (Rated by 3 people, viewed by 79 people)

This site belongs to a friend of mine.
It is a literature site, is really new so please dont be too rough..thank you!

Added by Sarai in Other

Eternal Blue Rose has 3 Reviews

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  1. waynekp gave it ***-- on 10th Jul 2009 and said:

    Normally the first thing that I comment on is my initial impression of the site. A great deal of that is related to the theme, and the initial overall impression of the way that it looks.

    I think the header is outstanding, very eye-catching. It is a very pretty design, and I wouldn't think of making any major overhauls to that. The one aspect that does really catch my attention is that all aspects of the site show up on the left side of my screen, and the left is simply a blue screen. I don't know enough about code to even begin suggesting a way to fix this, but I am sure there are many that are knowledgeable enough to offer help.

    I have found that it is important to have a proofreader that you can trust. I have one for my site, and she catches all sorts of things that I don't notice. It really is amazing what slips through the cracks. If you don't have a proofreader that you trust, you might consider writing your content in something like MS Word, where there is a spell check. Once you're happy with it, then cut and paste into the website.

    I see that you're active in the chat section of the site, but I really don't see any indication of whether or not you're posting new content elsewhere. I find one of the greatest challenges and greatest pleasures is adding new content. I really do feel that it is important to continually expand your site, and what you offer to entice new people to read.

    I have to agree with previous reviewers that the font should be large enough that it is easy for your readers to read. If you get someone to show you how to make that minor alteration to the code to enlarge the font, it really isn't very difficult.

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  2. Distant_Star gave it ***-- on 13th Jun 2009 and said:

    Hello Sarai I’ll be reviewing the site that you posted for review. You say it’s your friends? Why hasn’t your friend posted it than, do you contribute? Ah, I see now, she’s your twin. Okay, I can see that.

    First impression:
    Very blue. While I love (love love) blue, it just seems very dark. It’s a cute layout, but it seems very much squished together all on the left side.

    Layout:
    My monitor isn’t that big, but there’s loads of space (about half my screen actually) on the left hand side. Maybe make your content area take up some of that extra space? You may also want to make the site’s name bold or something; I didn’t notice it at first with all what’s going on in that area. What, no footer? It just sort of, stops at the end there. Maybe put in something else down there, links to more of your content or something… you could put your credit information in your footer? Um, and your font is tiny. My eyes aren’t that old, but I have to almost squint to see it, especially where it’s a semi-dark color on a dark background. You need a bigger size and more contrast between colors.

    Proofreading/Grammar:
    Since this is a pet peeve of mine, I gave it its own section. I will fully admit to missing a lot on my own site, but reading someone else’s mistakes irks me. Overall it looks decent, in spots it looks like a 16 year old girl wrote it, but that’s not all bad (especially since a 16 year old girl did write it …heh). I noticed a missing apostrophe on the about blurb at the top: I’ve was written as Ive. However, the more I dive in, the more I think you need to go through this site and spruce up the punctuation, capitalization and spelling a bit. Think of it as though you’re getting ready to submit a paper for school.

    Navigation:
    Ug, the hover links on the navigation makes it really hard to read because it’s so dark. Change that, please. Also, be consistent with how you type things. They either all need to be in all caps (which I wouldn’t recommend) or they need to be all capitalized at their first letter, or all lower case (which I also wouldn’t recommend).

    Coding:
    I’m not great at coding, but here’s what I’ve caught. You need a doctype, it’s pretty much a must. Is your CSS really inside your file?? And you’re using an iframe… but you have divs inside your .html file?? I don’t understand. Please separate the style from the content, lose the iframe and use the div’s you’ve already got in place. Otherwise, I ran your page (http://eternalblue.webs.com/main.html) through the almighty validator (http://validator.w3.org/). It didn’t do too bad, 10 errors, 5 warnings. But the things that you did miss, were kind of big things (like the doctype).

    Content:
    Meep! Your story layout needs help. Spacing between paragraphs please, it helps us poor old people read better. And that’s a chapter? It seems very short… But it’s filled with description … and teen drama but that’s fine because you’re a teen. You love your run-on sentences though. Here’s something I’ve learned, if you’re using and or but in a sentence, there’s a chance that you could make that into two sentences (unless it’s a list or something). Your dialogue moves things along well, but you could use more showing of their physical reactions.

    Instead of saying she bellowed, you could describe how the yell scratched at her throat, she felt her face warm with her anger, felt a vein pumping in her neck, things of that nature. When you write try to show what you’re seeing in your mind on the paper. It’s great to just rush through a scene because you have so much to say, you’re flying along getting it all out. But it doesn’t hurt to go back through and really drive home your point. Go through, reread it and you’ll catch a few other things that you missed in your haste to type (which I can completely relate to, because I do the same time).

    Your second ‘chapter’ is even shorter. And instead of putting current status updates for thoughts, just put their thoughts in italics and write so and so thought. And the brackets at the end aren’t needed, you can explain things mid-text if you want to and it’s fully part of your story. And write out the stand off between them over the dress, and show your readers the rock paper scissors battle as well.

    I don’t have much to say on your poetry (besides that there’s only one in a language that I am familiar with), that is one subject I usually avoid like the plague if I can help it. I can say that it looks like poetry. It looks like you’re familiar with the formatting that regular poets use, and that you have a lot to say. It’s in free verse, but that’s fine, most poets these days don’t follow the old conventions anyway.

    Other than that, you really don't have much up. Are you planning to add more of your writing to this site? You really need something more here to get visitors to stay longer.

    Overall:
    Overall, you site looks nice. I think you need some more space for your textual content to reside in. You need more colors, and more contrast between colors. You also need to do a thorough proofreading, but you don’t have much content so that shouldn’t take too long. Any questions on what I’ve said, or why I’ve said it, don’t hesitate to ask! And please don’t take this criticism roughly, I’m only trying to help you, and I mean no ill feelings.

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    Sarai's Response:

    Thanks for the review, it is helpful since I can spend hours on the website and not spot the mistakes.
    I know that is not completely validated but, this is not my layout, and I am no expert with coding yet so i am afraid of changing anything. So right now i am looking for a new layout that is more favorable..^___^
    thank you! no hard feelings

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    jenspeaks gave it ***-- on 2nd Jun 2009 and said:

    It's a pretty layout. But I think what bugs me most about it is, the font is too small. You should make it like 8pt (11px). And also, how about making it brighter. It's hard to see dark font on a dark background. Especially if someone has a somewhat dark monitor.

    Also, with your navigation, when you mouseover the options, it turns black. Black background, black font. What's with that? Make it like...white or blue-ish?

    That's really all I have to say about it.

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    Sarai's Response:

    thank you for the review...^___^
    i know that its a bit dark though i am afraid of changing it because its not my layout so im looking for a new one...

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