Zainab.air.ai

Zainab.air.ai

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A showcase of poetry and stories written by me. Please critique and leave a few comments if you like! :)

Added by zaizai in Personal

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  1. cocal gave it ***** on 17th Sep 2011 and said:

    Hi I am James and I run a music site (pop-starlet.co.nr). I will review your site on Windows XP using Mozilla Firefox. If you have any questions then feel free to contact me PRIVATELY.

    Site Name
    I have never seen an ending to a site by .air.ai it is most awkward. If I was a visitor then I would be very confused over that ending. Maybe try having a more simpler name (try freedomain.co.nr - they provide free domain names that are probably more suitable). I also think you should have named your site something a little bit more poetic than Zainab so the person going to your site knows what it's about.

    Layout
    Overall your layout is simplistic, it's nice but to simple for me. I love the way the dates of your poem are hanging out from the side - a fantastic effect and a great job. Also I would make the background stand out more, maybe having the background lined paper would be more suitable so it stands out.

    Content
    Your poems are very nice; you definately have a talent for writing these but I suggest putting them into categories. For example you could have a file for Fathers Day poems, one for Diwali, one for Christmas and more. That way not only would people by reading your work, they would be using it as well which increases your site promotion - so more people who know about it. You have make people use your content and not just stare at it as the poems are a waste - it's a shame really as they are like I said amazingly good.

    However make sure your clients don't copy these poems, protecting them with Copyscape can help you. You can see exactly who is stealing your poems

    Overall
    Overally the site is good, it has a lot of talent and potential. But now you must exploit this talent to everyone (promotion, advertising on people's site like mine)
    If you want to ask questions then ask me PRIVATELY

    Thanks

    UPDATED 17 Sep 11:
    I like your site a lot! Unless the layout has been up there for a long time, I don't believe that it needs to be updated at all. First impression: I think it's wonderful, and I want to stick around the site (that's saying a lot coming from me). The only impression thing that I dislike is that the favicon doesn't match anything in your layout.

    Only other thing that I don't like about your layout is that the text size is quite small. I am well aware that a lot of sites have text around that size, but making it just a little bigger would be nice. And after making it bigger, making the rest of the
    center part a bit wider would work too.

    Little Details
    1) Some of your affiliates' urls don't work anymore. Those should be updated.
    2) On the affiliates page, you should just display your codes all out in the open instead of having us click on the links. You don't have enough images for it to slow us down.
    3) I really like your "Kim's List" page! However, I also think that you should just list everything outright instead of having us click on links.
    4) In your "about" page, try beginning in the active voice than the passive voice. Lots of bloggers have this problem. Instead of saying "Rawrks.net is a collective that holds all the joined fanlistings, and owned fanlistings of the websites Vintage4Eternity and MockingJay.org" say "Rawrks.net is my, the owner of Vintage4Eternity and MockingJay.org, fanlisting collective".
    5) When you have text over a pattern, in both your fanlisting and collective layouts, I have a little trouble reading the text.
    6) If possible, clean out the broken links that your members have left...

    Finally, you do the one thing I wish fanlisting owners did more often! You write an about page for almost every

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  2. joeeld gave it ***-- on 21st Aug 2011 and said:

    My first impression of your site that it is very simplistic. I like that. I like your site name, although you also use a very unfamiliar TLD. I don't think I've ever heard of that. I found that on your about page, the layout just ends abruptly, there is no real footer. Maybe you could try and "end the notebook page." I enjoyed reading your poetry, you write very nicely. I think you could change your layout a bit more to make it more original because I have seen many notebook layouts. I hope that you continue to write though.

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  3. PopStarlet gave it ***-- on 27th Jun 2011 and said:

    Hi I am James and I run a music site (pop-starlet.co.nr). I will review your site on Windows XP using Mozilla Firefox. If you have any questions then feel free to contact me PRIVATELY.

    Site Name
    I have never seen an ending to a site by .air.ai it is most awkward. If I was a visitor then I would be very confused over that ending. Maybe try having a more simpler name (try freedomain.co.nr - they provide free domain names that are probably more suitable). I also think you should have named your site something a little bit more poetic than Zainab so the person going to your site knows what it's about.

    Layout
    Overall your layout is simplistic, it's nice but to simple for me. I love the way the dates of your poem are hanging out from the side - a fantastic effect and a great job. Also I would make the background stand out more, maybe having the background lined paper would be more suitable so it stands out.

    Content
    Your poems are very nice; you definately have a talent for writing these but I suggest putting them into categories. For example you could have a file for Fathers Day poems, one for Diwali, one for Christmas and more. That way not only would people by reading your work, they would be using it as well which increases your site promotion - so more people who know about it. You have make people use your content and not just stare at it as the poems are a waste - it's a shame really as they are like I said amazingly good.

    However make sure your clients don't copy these poems, protecting them with Copyscape can help you. You can see exactly who is stealing your poems

    Overall
    Overally the site is good, it has a lot of talent and potential. But now you must exploit this talent to everyone (promotion, advertising on people's site like mine)
    If you want to ask questions then ask me PRIVATELY

    Thanks

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    6birds gave it ***-- on 23rd Jun 2011 and said:

    Site Name & First Impression
    The site name is a little different than normal, and the domain name would be easier to remember if I was an active visitor of your website, maybe. If I was a normal visitor, I don't think I would stay on your website for very long. I'm not really a big fan of the color scheme - I find it to be very hard on the eyes. :(

    Coding and Validation
    Your coding is validated. :) Good job.

    Layout
    As I said in the first section, I'm not a huge fan of the color scheme. The coloring is hard on my eyes. Your main navigational links are half cut off - I can only see half of each word. The "home" link is over the last bit of your logo. Whenever I hover them, although I can see them, I'm not favoring the blurry, off-blue glowing text that it reveals. Your content section also stretches the width of my screen, which is nerve-wrecking for me. I think you have it too much over to the right.

    I don't understand why you are using a white border on your input and text areas when you haven't used it anywhere else. That doesn't make any sense to me, sorry.

    Also, perhaps a welcome message on the sidebar would be nice? :) It could give your visitors a little introduction and insight as to who you are! :)

    Content
    Your index page consists of your main content, and since it is your own writing, I'm not going to be all English-teacher-Nazi on you (not that I see anything wrong there).

    Your about page consists of only a few sentences that don't really tell me much about yourself - I'm left with the following questions:
    -Why did you start this blog?
    -Why are you sharing your writing?
    -How did you get into writing poetry?
    -About how old are you? (Or even what level of schooling you are, the highest level of education you have completed, etc.)

    Originality & Creativity
    I don't really have much to say here... The domain name is a creative one, even though it is your name. ^^

    Organisation & Errors
    If you link to the pages and the poetry category in your main navigation, then what is the point in having it on your sidebar?

    Overall Comment
    I'm not writing this in hopes of being listened to/everything I am saying to be taken into consideration/etc.; I'm writing this because I'm hoping that it will help you to improve. I love the effort, and if I were reviewing your site last year during my worst year, I probably would have either been really, really rude or really, really loving. But I'm not, and I've matured and learned a lot since then.

    I think that I would like your website more - and give it a higher rating - provided your color scheme was different. Perhaps you can use the same colors, but with different shades of them? Or maybe on a lighter/darker background? The colors look like off-color colors (if that even makes any sense!?), and they're just ... really kind of quite difficult for me to adapt to.

    However, I do think you have great potential, and I wish you much luck in the future! :)

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    Vivace gave it ****- on 24th May 2011 and said:

    First impression is that your layout is a little big. I don't see any real reason for your header to be as big as it is, and I tend to expect to see the navigation below the header, near the actual content. The layout is very readable once I get down to the actual writing.

    Overall, your poetry is quite good for your age. You aren't afraid to take risks with your vocabulary, and that's great. Don't feel like you have to use big words, though. Big images are more important.

    Browsing by category is very difficult, since it doesn't preserve the line breaks in your poetry. You might instead want to create a page where you link to your poems.

    I am a little curious about the title of the site, since none of the verse you have posted are actually haiku. You may at least want to consider the fact that, since "haiku" is a Japanese loan word, it's an irregular plural; more than one haiku are still called haiku.

    Once you have some more poetry and fiction to flesh the site out, I think it will be a nice place for readers to stop by.

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    zaizai's Response:

    Thanks for your review. I've changed the name of the site to just zainab.air.ai, put only titles in the category section, made a new layout that's slightly smaller. All your suggestions were very useful, so thanks for leaving a review :)

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